I just got my fucking report card
w/ my c in spanish im like dude your a retard
I dont want to show my parents b/c i will get grilled and charred
why the hell does this elective have to be so hard
My teacher makes me so freaking angry
no matter how much i use my creativity
I even try to the best of my ability
I cant help she treats me w/ such atrocity
poems are hard im much better at rapping freestyle
W/ poems you need to sit and ponder a while
I am just a white boy who likes to make people smile
so excuse me if this sux and sounds a bit juvinile
I appriciate the time you give to critique
I thank you for pointing out whats strong and whats weak
even though my poems lack in good technique
I am just trying to expand my horizons and be unique
Anonymous
09:24:29 PM
6 comments:
Interestingly enough, I heard this in my head w/ a rap beat before you mentioned it. It works pretty well...for a wanksta.
In the last stanza I would suggest changing "even though my poems lack in good technique" to "even though my poems are lacking good technique", I do not think that this reflects the work well, because from my point of view it is a good freestyle but this way it should read better.
"Word"
Yes. Very yes. I liked this.
me too :D your peotry isn t that bad at all, i enjoyed it
lol
:D
not bad...
it made me laugh =)
This is just to say
This is not good poetry.
Please spellcheck.
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